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 * Unit 5: Writing Summaries**


 * TASK 7 - Page 166 **

Here are some introductory statements that students wrote for a summary of the “Nile” passage in Task one. Which, if any, would you prefer to have written? Why? Edit the weaker sentences. A: how should be omitted.
 * 1) Author Steven Goodman in “Transformation of the Nile River Basin” states that how the region has changed as a result of continuous irrigation.

A: could add “ In ” at the beginning, and instead of claims would use explain, describe.
 * 1) “Transformation of the Nile River Basin” by Steven Goodman claims that changes in irrigation have led to an increase in population.

A: According to and suggests should not used together.
 * 1) According to “Transformation of the Nile River Basin” Steven Goodman suggests that the Nile River basin has been changed.

A: mention should not be used. It is better to use State, explain, describe.
 * 1) Goodman in “Transformation of the Nile River Basin” mentions that irrigation has had an impact on the environment and the population.

A: “In “Transformation of the Nile River Basin; Steven Goodman states that…
 * 1) In Goodman’s “Transformation of the Nile River Basin” the Nile River basin has been transformed by the introduction of perennial irrigation.